Question : It sounds kind of bad to me
Around September 3 1996, a 5 year old boy walked into Ms. Robinson s AM kindergarten class with nothing to his name and not knowing how to spell it, On June 11, 2009 4664 days, 12 grade levels, 6 schools and thousands of class mates later 300 or so 17, 18 and maybe 19 year olds walk out into the real world with a Diploma and a whole lot more knowledge.
Answer : I find it very interesting that you came up with '4664 days' because the number '4664' is the prison number that Nelson Mandela wore while he was imprisoned.
I don't mean anything by giving you that piece of trivia, I'm just saying, I thought it was really interesting.
Just a suggestion, I would change that to 'On Jun 11, 2009, over 4,000 days later...'
You've shifted from talking about you to talking about the entire school. Somewhere in there you need to make that shift grammatically.
On June 11, 2009, over 4,000 days later, 12 grade levels, 6 schools and thousands of classmates later, this young man and approximately 300 young adults ranging in age from 17 to 19 yrs old will walk out into the real world with a dipolma and more knowledge then when we first began our walk in the world of education.
The first part of your paragraph you discuss youself. The second part you bring in 300 other students but you didn't build the bridge in that paragraph to make that shift.
Question : What is the type of this paragraph..its narrative?
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experienced the biggest change in my life when I was 14 years of age, which I think was and still is important to me. I have really changed. The way I act, my attitude and even the language I use every day has changed. First, it seemed to be strange and unusual, but after a year or so, it became normal to me.
Before I came to Ireland, I lived in Lithuania. It i..
Answer : Yes, that is a narrative paragraph. Please vote me best answer ! (:
Question : okay im writing a persuasive essay on school uniforms and im against school uniforms well i already have my intro and the 1st paragraph and in that first paragraph i wrote about how we wouldn't be able to express ourselevs now im stuck on the next one i dont know what else to write and my reason for it can somebody help me i really need it
Answer : You need 3 reasons to argue for or against something in an essay. You have one, now two to go. What else do you disagree with about school uniforms? Choose 2 more reasons why and discuss each in a separate paragraph. Then conclude it. GOod Luck!